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     She sat on my stoop every Sunday morning, scratching her rash speckled calves with dirt infested nails and destroying the bird nests in her faded green hair with her claws. Two bibles struggled against the cheeks of her hemp bag and poked their ragged corners out of moth bitten holes. The dimples in her cheeks reminded me of my aunt, and they bent in whenever she flashed her rotted roots at me. She stopped scratching when I climbed the steps and commenced as soon as I shut the door behind me. I could watch her draw blood from my apartment window.

     Every Sunday at nine, I brought her hot coffee in a Styrofoam cup on my way to work, and returned to find the cup’s quartered remnants, instead of her, on the stoop. Sometimes on Mondays, she woke me with the radio’s crackling songs just in time for work. Rock, always.

     If not for my involvement and the landlord’s hidden identity, Mrs. Craven might have had her cast off the stoop. The reports she dropped in the landlord’s mailbox complained about Aerosmith at five, HIM at eight, and ‘the other blasphemies,’ of rock. I read them, circled her spelling mistakes, and tacked them on the cork board in my kitchen. The day the woman was finally taken away, by someone in a uniform or by her own need, I sent the drafts to Mrs. Craven.

     It wasn’t long before, perhaps from a similar need to the woman’s, I moved out of the city. I rented a room in a country inn, and spent five months there before I decided that I would spend the year. I often remembered the junkie and her tangled green hair, like a mermaid washed ashore. I never did move back to the city.
©2009 `WineWriter
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An attempt to get reacquainted with the short story writing process.

Update: :dance: A DD! Maaaany thanks to ^LadyLincoln! It was such a great surprise. :D Thank you to everyone for their great comments and faves. I'm very grateful. :) :hug:

Daily Deviation

Given 2009-06-04

Mermaid by `WineWriter, might surprise you. But one of the the most clever things about this wonderful short story is how one interesting thought can provoke several others and also leave a lasting impression on us. (Featured by ^LadyLincoln)

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:iconmooneson:
Wonderful as always, I loved your description of her.

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Love can mend your life, but love can break your heart.-The Police
:iconwinewriter:
Thank you :)

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Lt. Maria Laguerta: So then he must have already had the head with him in the front seat. Huh, that's weird. Why would he keep it there?
Dexter Morgan: I don't know. So he could use a carpool lane.
:iconmooneson:
You are kindly welcomed.

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Love can mend your life, but love can break your heart.-The Police
:iconyouinventedme:
I absolutely love the way you conclude this.

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I am a poetry admin for =DailyLitDeviations.
:iconwinewriter:
Thank you :)

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Lt. Maria Laguerta: So then he must have already had the head with him in the front seat. Huh, that's weird. Why would he keep it there?
Dexter Morgan: I don't know. So he could use a carpool lane.
:iconelevatorangel:
this is really beautiful & original.
:icontakjak:
I love it. Short stories are awesome because you have to cram so much into so little. The descriptions just add so much character, and though the beginning confused me at first, the ending was very interesting. I love it.

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<Suruma>There sure are alot of girlfriends of fictional characters on dA. I've seen like a million Sasuke's Girlfriends. Someone should tell those girls that their fictional boyfriends arent being faithful
-The LOL Corner[#69]
:iconmemnalar:
Powerfully and poignantly described. Congratulations on your DD! :heart:
:iconagdfantasylover:
Described beautifully. I don't know how you were able to write such a full story in such a short space. Kudos :clap:!

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Intolerant of the intolerant

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